Stephen White is the NYT bestselling author of sixteen Alan Gregory mystery/thrillers and a stand alone thriller released in 2009, THE SIEGE. White adds power to his plots and writing craft with the skill and expertise of an experienced clinical psychologist, because he is. His latest high-tension thriller elevates readers' blood pressure--and keeps it revved on every page.
REVIEWS:
"Stephen White continues to be amazing. He is among the best of our contemporary authors laboring in any genre, combining plot, characterization, and excellent, solid storytelling to make each of his works not so much a novel as an event."
— Joe Hartlaub, BookReporter.com
"The unexpected is the norm in this breathless, unconventional, chiller of a story that will stay with you long after the book is closed."
~ Review of THE SIEGE in the Daily Herald
How does Stephen White spear the reader's heart? What's his magic?
The magic is in the expert development and application of all components of a novel--including (but not limited to) plotting, story telling, characters, voice, and writing craft. My expertise is writing craft. But -- I'll share one powerful story telling element Stephen White utilized in THE SIEGE. It's a hostage story, but he didn't write any scenes from the hostage takers POV.
He keeps every page suspenseful, because no one knows what's going on in the seemingly impregnable building the hostage takers claimed on the Yale campus. No one knows who may die next, or why. Not the FBI, not the Hostage Response Team, not the hostage negotiator, not Sam Purdy.
Not the reader.
Let's dig in, dig deep, and analyze some lines and a psychologically-powered passage from THE SIEGE.
Example: Description--
He is six-three, two-ten, and looks like he sleeps in a bronze casting of Atlas. He is the star high school quarterback gone good.
Analysis:
Stephen provided a strong visual of this young man. But he avoided a trite description, and had fun with Cliche Play twice. He didn't say he looked like Atlas, but made it more interesting. What if he had quit there? What if he limited his description to one sentence. Read it out loud:
He is six-three, two-ten, and looks like he sleeps in a bronze casting of Atlas.
It needs another sentence for balance. Read the two sentences out loud:
He is six-three, two-ten, and looks like he sleeps in a bronze casting of Atlas. He is the star high school quarterback gone good.
Better cadence. Can you hear it? Have you trained your Cadence Ear?
White also gave the reader a Humor Hit with the Cliche Twist at the end. Most readers would start reading that sentence and anticipate this ending: . . . the high school quarterback gone bad.
The 'gone good' ending provides a surprise. It also reinforces the reader's image of this character as a golden boy. A subconsious association: no harm comes to golden boys.
Example: Proximity --
She stopped and stood maybe ten inches from me. Ann had no trouble with close.
Analysis:
A simple piece. Nothing amazing in those fifteen words. Why did I spotlight them?
Because Stephen White took a basic proximity shift piece and wrote it to avoid overused phrases, deepen characterization, and give the reader another humor hit.
He could have written one of these five invisible lines:
1. Ann stepped closer.
2. Ann moved toward me.
3. Ann closed the distance between us.
4. Ann walked forward until she stood within inches of me.
5. Ann stepped so close I could smell her perfume (hair spray, minty breath . . . ).
Have you read any or all of those five lines, or variations?
Have you written any or all of those five lines, or variations?
Stephen White opted to write fresh, write strong, and add a hint of humor.
Example: Interpreting Physical Responses, Facial Expressions, and Eye Messages from Non-POV Character
Ann didn't have to say a word.
I've been a cop for a long time. The transformation I saw in her face as she processed the first sounds in her ear from the call she'd received on her cell is a thing I've seen on a dozen or so other faces over the years. In the fleeting moment that it takes for life's routine to be replaced by the disarray of despair and for hope to be swapped with horror, the eyes seem to learn the news before the rest of the face suspects a thing.
It's a cascade of anguish as the rumor spreads. The eyes go wide before the brows rise in protest. The corners of the mouth flatten before the cheekbones drop even a millimeter. Tears form before the skin closest to the lips begins to quiver.
ON THE NEXT PAGE:
Ann placed the phone on the table in front of her. When she looked back up at me, I saw sparks of fear and an inclination to cower spilling from her eyes like slag leaching from steel. What was left in her eyes was rage and determination.
ONE PARAGRAPH LATER:
Ann was getting worked like my friend's steel. And like his steel, she was getting stronger.
Analysis:
That's one heck of a mulit-faceted amplified response. It worked for me.
Out of context, I hope you could tell that Ann just learned something on the phone. Something more terrifying than she could instantly process.
Stephen White amplified this passage because it's a turning point. He wanted to spotlight Ann's intense emotional response. He wanted to draw the reader deep into Ann's emotional experience. He wanted the reader to identify with her pain.
What did Stephen White do?
1. He gave the reader specificity. Big time specificity. Along the lines of micro-expressions from the TV show "Lie To Me" specificity.
2. He used rhetorical devices to empower the message and empower the cadence. Parallelism. Alliteration. Similes. Read it out loud. You'll hear the cadence. You'll spot the rhetorical devices.
3. He used Power Words: despair, horror, suspects, anguish, rumor, protest, sparks, fear, cower, rage, determination, tears, quiver, stronger. Fourteen power words in 196 words.
4. He avoided trite and wrote fresh.
5. He provided strong imagery.
6. He took it to my fourth level of Powering Up Emotion. He added emotional impact by giving the reader a Super Empowered passage.
One More Example: Amplified Description --
I thought his voice was tired. Not long-day tired. Long-life tired. I was thinking he was mid-forties.
If he were a used car, he'd be one to be wary of. Body looked okay. But the frame was probably bent. Sheet metal was covered with putty. Seals leaked. Needed rings. Bottom line? He had way more mileage than the odometer revealed.
Analysis:
Stephen had fun sharing the POV character's impressions of this guy through metaphor. Interesting, and effective. The metaphor kept it fresh and fun.
He used epistrophe in the first paragraph. He ended three sentences in a row with tired. Epistrophe is one of the 30+ rhetorical devices I teach in my Deep Editing course and lecture packets.
I consider Stephen White one of the masters of writing craft. I can count on him to write fresh in every area. I can count on him to power up visceral responses, to include powerful nuanced body language and dialogue cues, and to provide me with a galaxy of stellar lines and passages to showcase my teaching points. ;-) I can also count on him to deliver an award-winning read.
You can count on Stephen White's writing too.
